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| All comments are appreciated! Source. One of my favorite feel-good songs is Best Day of My Life by American Authors. I've seen them in concert twice, and it was amazing! I hope you enjoy! |
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| All comments are appreciated! Source. One of my favorite feel-good songs is Best Day of My Life by American Authors. I've seen them in concert twice, and it was amazing! I hope you enjoy! |
WOW. Just got done reading what you have so far for your storybook. And I LOVE it! The setting is great! An empty bar and a bartender eager for some excitement in his life! It seems he will be getting much more than he bargained for throughout the night haha. Hera and Zeus are always interesting to read about, but I love the distressed wife angle you have for this story. Also kudos to her for being able to throw back that much straight whiskey. I mean I guess she is a goddess, she can do anything. I really enjoyed how your intro set up the bartender's background. The only question I may ask is like does he have a family? Like if he had been planning on closing at midnight but stays out with Hera all night what would his wife do? Would she show up at 4 am all angry at him? That might be an interesting turn for the ending. Just a thought. Overall, I thought it was very intriguing and I am excited to read more as you post new stories throughout the semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole! Your storybook seems awesome! I already read your first story after reading your introduction! You did a great job of giving background information, and I loved the story of the bar. I thought it was a really cool idea to use the time stamps throughout the stories too, and I really liked the time lapses. You really painted a vivid picture of Hera, which was a definite selling point in your introduction. I just wanted to know more about her situation, and how she ended up alone at a bar. I think it will intrigue all of your readers to continue on to the next page! The background to your posts combined with the colors you used for the stories really sets the tone, and I thought it was a great addition to your stories. Everything seemed to be in working order too, which is great! I will definitely be reading the rest of your stories soon!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction is really good! I never would have thought to make Olympus a bar. That's really creative! I like how you gave background about the bar, talked a little about its past, and then described the current state of it. I like that you talked about how Olympus used to be a place for the wealthy, but not so much anymore, which was why it was weird that Hera was there in the first place. You did a great job describing her appearance and indicating why she really didn't seem like she belonged at the bar! Maybe the introduction could give a little bit more indication about why she's so upset? I feel like you know so little about Hera besides the fact that she's clearly distressed and kind of wants to vent. It could also be a cool to give a little more background as to who "he" is and maybe a little bit of an indication about why she's so upset with him. Overall, your introduction is really great! I can't wait to see the rest of your storybook!
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole! The intro to your storybook was great! My favorite part was the ending! It left me hanging and definitely made me want to read more! I also like how you incorporated Olympus and Titan into the story, but made them into bars. I really like it when people keep familiar names, but give them a new identity! You did a great job at explaining the setting and describing the bar and how it used to be the go to place. Something you might consider would be to maybe extend your introduction just a little bit. Maybe you could give a little more history about Hera, or give a hint about who she's upset with and why. You could just mention where Hera was from or why she ended up in your bar without giving too much away and still have your cliffhanger at the end. Overall I think you did a good job on your introduction and I can't wait to read more and hear Hera's full story!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction is really clever. I like how you set Olympus as a bar. Introducing Hera as a women scored is a great way to tell the story of Zeus and the women he has cheated on her with. You had a great description so the bar, I can really imagine the run down place with a single customer. Sounds like an introduction is an old movie.
ReplyDeleteWhen Hera flirts with the bartender, it sounds like she's going to get some revenge on Zeus by being unfaithful to him. I am curious to see where the rest of the story goes.
Wow, I cannot believe Hera took that child away from the mother out of vengeance. It's Zeus's fault and her quarrel should be with him, especially since Semele didn't know he was married. This gives Hera a very human touch, and sells her as a character. Nice job with the story.
Hi Nicole! I read your introduction and it was great! I absolutely loved it. Your whole storybooks page really sets up the scene for your stories and adds another layer to the experience. I like how you made the introduction a cliffhanger. It was the perfect length and really caused me to want to read more. It sounds like you have the makings for some great characters in your book also. There are so many interesting things you could do with Hera's character, I am excited to see how she turns out and what her story is! I like how you incorporated a pretty normal guy like the bar owner into what seems to be an unusual set of stories. Its always fun to read about eclectic characters and their interactions with every day people. While I really liked that your writing is in red because it sets the tone for the story, I did find it a little hard to read. Good luck on the rest of your book! I look forward to hopefully reading more of your stories.
ReplyDeleteNicole, I really liked how you used white and black for your text on your blog. This made your stories easy to read and more enjoyable for me! I also really liked all the photos you used! Great work!
ReplyDeleteNicole. I like your background theme. I like how you put your labels above
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I LOVE American Authors! I listened to their EP (when it came out) on repeat for a week I think. They have a very interesting sound and their songs just sound so happy. I think I like Believer, Luck, and Ghost most from their album (that was finally released). I haven't kept up with them so I don't know if they released anything new...
ReplyDeleteThis is such a good song! Every time I hear it on the radio it puts me in a good mood. I didn't realize it was the American Authors who sang it. I don't know much about this band, but because I enjoy listening to this song I am definitely going to listen to more from them. Thank you for sharing this music video!
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ReplyDeleteNicole, what a great song choice! You are so right when you said that this was a great “feel good song.” I feel like if I listened to this every morning then I would be inspired to make each day “the best day of my life.” I had never seen this music video before, but I really enjoyed watching it! Thanks for sharing it with us!
I love this song! I am so glad you picked it, this song always makes me smile. I had never seen the video before and I really liked it. The bear or whatever it was threw me off at first. But honestly is was a good idea because it caught my eye and was unique.
ReplyDeleteI like this song. I have heard of the song for sure, but I have not watched the video. I thought it was interesting video. I think this is a great song for a reading. I think you did a great job at choosing song because this will totally help me on focusing for your stories in the future. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI really like the song you chose. I often hear it on the radio, and have always enjoyed listening to it. I have never actually looked up who sings the song and am not familiar with this band's other songs. I think it's really cool that you've seen them in concert. Maybe now that I know who sings this song I will go check out some more.
ReplyDeleteThis song is so good! I haven't heard it in so long, but it's so catchy and fun to listen to! It's so upbeat and was one of my favorites when it first came out. You actually inspired me to put it back on my playlist because I remembered how much I liked it. I don't think I've ever seen the music video, so that also was kind of cool. Great choice!
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole, after I read the Introduction for your Storybook I was immediately hooked! I only read one of your stories about Hera and the bartender, but I'm interested to find out what happens next! I also like that you kept time stamps throughout the Introduction and the following stories-- I thought that was a nice added touch. It made me feel like I was at the bar with them! You definitely have a talent for storytelling. The only thing I would suggest revising is your body text-- it is harsh to the eyes to read bright red text on a black background. Otherwise, great job! I like how you took an old story and related it to modern times. I thought that was so cool that you did that! It definitely makes your readers feel like they can relate to the story. I can't wait to read more of your stories on your Storybook in the future weeks to come!
ReplyDeleteFirst off the theme, color, and pictures of your story book go really well together! You also have a great use of words. It makes it easy to picture everything in my head. Great adjectives! They mystery to your introduction was definitely a hook. I had to continue reading on to the next story.
ReplyDeleteI also think it was a cleaver idea to add the time. It also adds to the story nicely. After reading the end of each story I was always anxious to go on to the next. I couldn't help but ask my self what happens next. You also did a great job on adding to the characters personalities. I like how the bartender was trying to be nice but straight up told her that this was his bar.
The picture in Zeus and Semele is great! I think the way you made the baby be adopted was a good idea. So far I am a fan of your stories and I think you have done a great job with your story book! I look forward to reading the last story!
Hey Nicole! I really enjoyed reading your story. You did such a good job with using so many descriptive words to show what was going on in the story. It felt like I was right there in the bar listening to Hera’s story! I also liked the setting you chose for your storybook. Bar tenders often hear people’s dark secrets and gossip and in a way are almost therapists for the people who come in and talk to them. If I were him I would be a little nervous talking to Hera since she sounds so intense! Plus her husband is Zeus so he could come after him in rage. I thought it was creative how you kept the reader updated on what time it was throughout the story. It let us know how long the conversation was and made me feel engaged in what was going on! You also did a good job with your back and forth conversation… I never was confused in who was talking when! Great Story!
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ReplyDeleteI am from the Indian Epics class and I chose your storybook to comment on this week! I was completely drawn in by the title and it doesn't even compare to how awesome your stories are! First, I love the look and feel to your storybook. It feels like I am about to read some scandalous stuff about Zeus. I cannot wait. You did a good job portraying the secret role of a bartender, aka: every drunk person's therapist. This just reminds me of how Zeus pretty much never gets in trouble for his actions. He's normally the one who causes the problems! Oh, Hera. ALSO HOLY CRAP HADES! I was not expecting that at all! Very very good plot twist! I want to know what happens next. I am so curious now. After all he has heard, he has to do something for her honor. I appreciated that you told us the time frequently. It adds to the story be showing how much time she is spending at the bar telling her stories. I think that is a pretty significant detail. Great job! You're really doing awesome with this.
I have been meaning to check back and I just now got around to it. Wow! Your second story was just as great as the first! I love the changes you made to make it more modern day situation versus the sort of crazy God stuff. But I do agree, Hera most definitely would kill all of her husbands lovers greek mythology or otherwise! I love the way you build suspense throughout your stories. It is absolutely amazing. I also love how you added the bartender in as hitting on her. He probably thinks he is hot stuff while Hera is over there laughing to herself! I also find it slightly ironic that she is being slightly flirtatious with this bartender as she is telling of her horrible cheating husband. A nice little twist in the story there...I wonder how that will end up!
ReplyDeleteJust went ahead and read the last story. OH MY GOSH. Talk about a plot twist. This is like Pretty Little Liars level plot twist. What a sly dog! He knew who she was the minute she walked in the bar I am sure! You did a fabulous job with this storybook. I am truly impressed. I love how you kept him acting like the good guy by sending her home and taking care of her when she got sick. He even refrained from making the first move. But of course Hera is going to move in! Hera and Zeus's relationship has always been crazy. Doesn't Hades know she will end up choosing Zeus? Oh well it would be a fun story to keep playing out. You could do a Storybook Round Two! Overall this was a great storybook and I am so glad that I got to read it! Thank you for your amazing work!
ReplyDeleteHello! Nicole! I am back to leave comment about your storybook! My first impression over your storybook was just wow! The theme of the storybook is so wonderful. It is so dark yet not disturbing but rather elegant. I really loved the picture you posted for the front page. Since the background image was a bar, I think picture of a woman drinking alone at the bar just perfect matches with your topic for your storybook. I was so impressed with so much detailed you considered for your storybook. It was just wow. I think red font you used was also perfect for your theme. I like how each part of the story has different time. So the story progressed as time passed, it was just a brilliant idea and I really enjoyed your stories because I could focus more! Great job! I think it was the most interesting storybook I have seen so far.
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole! Wow! you are a very talented writer! This storybook is amazingly written and super intriguing! I am glad someone is writing about all of the cheating that went on with Zeus because it seems like no one really cared when the all mighty Zeus did something bad. Everyone just let him get away with it!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the Introduction and leading into all the stories in the storybook! It was beautifully set up in a bar that used to popular, which I loved was called Olympus. The way the bartender is the narrator is perfect, and you made him sound so movie like bar tender authentic! It was perfect. I could just visualize Hera walking in all distraught and flustered with make up running down her face. I also love the title of your storybook, it fits the scene just right! It seems so common for women to be disrespected by a men then the women go drink the night away complaining about said man. Very good storybook!
Hi Nicole! WOW, Olympus as a bar! And Zeus and Hera! And Hades in disguise, kind of! I really liked how you made Hades a bartender--he's actually described as kind of a fatherly god of the dead in a lot of places, so it seems to me that he probably actually spends a lot of his time listening to people tell their sob stories. And I liked how you made Hera out to be a sane woman with volatile emotions who knows that her actions are wrong and who drinks a lot rather than the crazy, completely-sure-of-her-actions wife that she's made out to be in a lot of places. The only thing I thought was a little fishy was the fact that she didn't know Zeus had a brother, or that Hades never thought about Zeus being his brother while she was telling him all these things--I would have liked to know why that was. But anyway, AWESOME job, and good luck as you finish up the semester!
ReplyDeleteHey Nicole! First of all, I love that song! One of my favorite bands, and it has such a good video. So, good choice! I should've thought about that for my own video on my wall.
ReplyDeleteI am here to give some feedback regarding your storybook, and I must say that I really enjoyed it! The imagery and layout of your storybook are very well done. Imagery is so important in writing, and can really help you give an effective message to your readers. I feel like that is not lost with you, it is evident throughout your storybook! The character development you have is also great, and it really made me feel like I could relate. I really like how you depicted Hera, it made her so much more relatable! She knows her actions are wrong, but she continues to do them. Funny! You are obviously a very talented writer, I hope the rest of your semester and your finals go okay!